Winter

Dec 15, 12:52 PM

Neverending snow
white tears falling from the sky
coating all colours

— Hannah

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say something

  1. You need to place some kind of tension or disjuncture/contrast into your haiku to create an interesting moment. Otherwise it is just a descriptive observation with rather little that readers will remember it by :) Especially the third line is crucial – mostly it is here that the tension is relieved or some kind of climax is reached. This makes for haikus that send a shiver down your spine – all in seventeen syllables ;)

    (I know, mine aren’t perfect either)

    — Malte · Dec 15, 02:45 PM · #

  2. It was not my intention to produce a good (will never be perfect) haiku but to give my thoughts a place in words. I know that the last line is boring, I’m not shivering when reading it :)

    I’ll try sometime else to write a good haiku.

    — hannah · Dec 16, 03:04 PM · #

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